This is the last iPad blog. Sheldon the FedEx guy delivered it nearly two months ago. It’s been one of the more compelling experiences with technology since I placed the original and somewhat useless 128K Mac on my desk in January 1984 and all my friends came over to stare at it and play with the mouse, which no one had ever seen before.

When Steve Jobs said the iPad was a “game changer,” it was easy to dismiss the comment as more Apple hyperbole. I certainly didn’t know I wanted a tablet computer until the iPad marketing assault began. Walking down Michigan Ave. in Chicago, every single bus shelter advertised it.  I thought I was well served with two laptops, Mac and Windows, an iMac desktop and a Blackberry.

Well, Steve, you are right—again. The iPad is a game changer. But it’s also a tabula rasa, a blank slate, which doesn’t reveal its secrets until some time passes. Also, if you are not already an iPhone user, there is a learning curve with the keyboard and touch technology. It could defeat some potential users.

I had elected to stay with my Blackberry when the iPhone came out, with some trepidation and craving for the other product but I have to admit, it’s one time where the utilitarian, efficient BB met my needs better—though when the next upgrade comes around and the iPhone 4 problems are solved, I probably will switch. Despite Mac synching software for the Blackberry, I’ve had a lot of trouble with keeping calendars and contacts intact on both.

Along with the Wall Street Journal’s Walt Mossberg, I believe touch technology could surpass laptops and the previous generation of mouse and point-click interface. The tech isn’t perfect, particularly in its word processing applications, but it is highly functional for basic document entry, editing and emailing. It’s a trade off—size and portability versus functionality.

Here are the ways I am using my iPad:

1. The Big Surprise: the plain vanilla Apple Notes app. While there are improved versions like the $1.99 NotePadPro, the basic version has made my note taking efficient in ways I couldn’t imagined. On my office shelf right now, there are a pile of legal pads I’m about to throw out. I will never buy one again, saving all that paper and expense. This is how the iPad pays for itself. I go to a meeting, give it a name and that’s recorded as the file name on top. I make notes and can email them or refer to them in a list later. Fantastic.
2. Media: one of the reasons I bought the iPad was to get rid of daily newspaper delivery and I did—no more daily Globe and Mail and Sunday New York Times, for the first time in more than 30 years. It took a lot for me to do that, especially the Times to which I am ultra loyal. Neither app is perfect, and one wishes more from the NYT. I’d be willing to pay for it, when the time comes; so far the Globe is terribly behind the Times, unlike the Wall Street Journal whose app is both fantastic and totally annoying, peppered with pleas for subscriptions when contact is locked.  One does receive enough of the Journal to learn from it.
3. Books: The Apple reader is coming on line in this country, as copyrights are straightened out and will be useful but mostly I’ve gotten stuff from Kindle. I really like the sample idea, where you receive a chapter or two and then can download the rest if you want—it’s no different than a bookstore, where you can practically read the whole book if you are willing to sit there long enough. The reading surface is fine; you don’t need the “ink reader.” The book app has made a huge difference; I take the iPad with me on the subway and don’t have to struggle with a book or a paper. I haven’t been on a plane yet with it but I am looking forward to that too. If you have an iPad with books on it, you can read just about anywhere and don’t have to plan in advance. I just love it. A huge plus in efficiency and environmental concern
4. Music: I play guitar and the music-related apps have been a revelation. I didn’t think anticipate that these would be so important and life changing but they have. Previously, I had notebooks full of songs and they’d fall out or rip or whatever: total disorganization. With an app like Totalguitar.com, I can reproduce my song collection, including tabs, for finger positions, in alphabetical order, without paper! Also game-changing; coupled with Guitar Scales and Guitar Tuner, I have a portable gig set up and can play happily on my porch with everything I need. GuitarTab was free but a waste.

Other apps I’ve downloaded include (with comments)

• Guardian Eyewitness, fantastic daily color news photos and photo tips
• The Weather Channel, which I am highly dependent on; hourly weather and radar
• Instapaper, a great app for repurposing web stories for later reading or circulation
• Streamitall radio, not so hot, very limited supply of stations
• Urbanspoon, great restaurant locations
• FatSecret, keeps track of food, which I must do better with
• Twitter and InstantMessenger, both work well
• Flipboard—this must be very popular already, as there is a waiting list to add email addresses for incorporating Facebook and Twitter
• Skype—well, Steve, no camera makes this one less that perfect but the voice works just fine. Get a camera, OK? And a phone, too!
• Pages—Apple’s word processor. A few features missing but it works well, given the medium’s limitations.

I have my eye on more iWork apps, Scrabble and Wired—but another time. The case is also well worth purchasing; let’s the pad stand up and holds it in one place.

Complaints: why doesn’t iTunes have radio, just like the desktop/laptop version? Why no camera—it’s silly. Just withdrawing something because the iPhone has it? There inevitably will be a phone too; you know it and I know it, Steve.

Absence of Flash so far hasn’t been a major problem—can’t listen to the my favourite radio station, Q107 Classic Rock, as it’s player doesn’t’ run without it. WiFi is adequate most places but when the signal is faint, it’s a problem. Works great in Starbucks but not at Humber College.

To draw a picture of how I use it, it’s something like this:

• Sit on porch, read, play guitar or write and correct papers
• Mealtimes, particularly breakfast: read Journal, Times, Globe
• Public transportation, catch up on books
• Bedtime, books or IM
• Random emails or web searching around the house
• Meetings: take notes
• Encounters with the uninitiated (even with a pretty girl on the subway): demonstrate it, show it off. Even the rabbi wanted to see it and took an hour reviewing it. He wants one too.

Thanks, Apple and Steve. Now why didn’t buy the stock?

Tags: Apple Inc., Editing, good writing, iPad, Public Relations, Steve Jobs, The New York Times, Wall Street Journal, Walt Mossberg, Writing

Calling out XM Canada, an old client at the Wilcox Group and something I subscribe to, for bad writing is painful but this is too good (bad) to pass up. I am indebted to my Humber College class for pointing it out—the individual herself will remain nameless to protect her later job prospects but thanks just the same. We review good and bad writing as a way of trying to articulate how it works or not. It was very clear to her that this did not adhere to what we learn as best practices. Here’s the story:

XM Canada Kicks Off Search for The Ultimate Soccer Party Guest with Online Video Challenge

Best Seats in the House Up for Grabs for 2010 FIFA World Cup Final Game at Wayne Gretzky’s Restaurant in Toronto

TORONTO, June 25 /CNW/ – There is no bigger event in sports than the FIFA World Cup(TM) and no better destination for sports fans than XM Canada(TM), the country’s leading audio entertainment company. In celebration of its in-depth sports coverage, from MLB(R) and The PGA TOUR(R) to the final 10 playoff matches of the 2010 FIFA World Cup South Africa, XM today kicked-off The Ultimate Soccer Party Guest Challenge in search of the best party guest in Canada. The lucky winner will celebrate the 2010 FIFA World Cup Final in front-row style with 24 friends at Wayne Gretzky’s Restaurant in Toronto on July 11th.

Note how many questions this writing raises:

1. There is no bigger event in sports than the FIFA World Cup(TM) Is that news? While it’s true now is it intrinsically reality at all times? Why begin with it; is it something editors need to be informed about while it’s happening? Why the TM? Not necessary in a news release, which isn’t advertising or marketing copy and never ever used in media. Just annoys editors who have to take it out.
2. And no better destination for sports fans (TM) than XM Canada, the country’s leading audio entertainment company. Another useless TM with more wasted commercial message.Where’s the news? Aren’t news releases supposed to start with the story? Are we reading an ad here?
3. In celebration of its in-depth sports coverage, from MLB(R) and The PGA TOUR(R) to the final 10 playoff matches of the 2010 FIFA World Cup South Africa…Still wondering what the story is and why we need to know about and celebrate MLB and PGA (in unnecessary caps, no less, and the two R marks, ever seen those in the news)? This is not inverted pyramid style, following news values, it’s the pyramid right side up.
4. XM today kicked-off The Ultimate Soccer Party Guest Challenge in search of the best party guest in Canada. The lucky winner will celebrate the 2010 FIFA World Cup Final in front-row style with 24 friends at Wayne Gretzky’s Restaurant Finally…some news! In the fifth line of the story. Not the biggest story in the world but certainly more useful to editors than ‘celebrating in-depth sports coverage.’

After considering writing various company leaders about this release, the class urged me contact the author directly to avoid creating difficulty for her and we said:

“Today in our PR writing class at Humber College, we were looking at examples of different types of PR writing and we came across your release for XM Canada and the best party guest competition. 

We were puzzled by your lead and second paragraph; it struck us that it buried the news and we were also wondering about the usage of TM in a news release when it is never published in media. 

Also the sentences appear to be lengthy as well as there were many company acronyms mentioned. 

Could you tell us for PR educational purposes what was your thought processes concerning this news release? Is there a specific format to be followed? What is the rationale for this style?”

She responded promptly with a certain candour:

“Thanks for your note.  I agree with your points about what typically are good approaches for releases. As I am sure you can understand, unfortunately, we can’t give you and your class much more context on how this specific release was developed due to standard confidentiality about client projects and processes.

I’d be more than happy to share our general point-of-view of writing for the media and social media.”

We will be inviting her soon….

Tags: Blogs, Editing, good writing, News Releases, Public Relations, social media, Twitter, Writing

The Wilcox Group’s closing hit me like the proverbial ton of bricks. I had put my heart into the place, as VP–Investor Communications on such accounts as Kinross Gold and daring entrepreneur John Bitove’s the XM Radio IPO and his other companies Priszm Income Fund (KFC, Taco Bell) and Scott’s REIT. Mat Wilcox, founder and CEO, is one of the greatest talents in the PR business. If she had been in New York instead of Vancouver, she would have had 400 people in her employ instead of the 30 or so there were at WG’s peak, when there were offices in BC and Toronto.

Wilcox was Mat and Mat was Wilcox. The firm was inseparable from her shadow; there was a heavy component of micromanagement, which kept some clients happy and often alienated and disturbed professionals who believed they should be accorded more space and intellectual liberty. It was her firm though and she built it from the ground up. Who am I to say how she should run it? (Although I did, mistakenly).

Mat had had some serious health problems, well documented in a highly revealing account when she was named one of the  country’s 100 most influential women. It broke her heart to close the Toronto office, which she dutifully visited every other week, flying cross country, a daunting schedule for anyone, especially a person who arose at 4 am almost daily–even after her dual cancer treatments.

One of the most telling comments in Wilcox’s valedictory was her thoughts about social media. Expressing her unbridled enthusiasm for the communications revolution of our time, she also noted that “the financial model” for it does not exist–meaning the energy and time required to develop an online brand, either personally or in a corporate sense has not found its proper financial reward.

It’s always sad when an organization one has known and loved is no more. LA PR guru Martin Cooper expressed this well when Harshe-Rotman & Druck, Inc collapsed in the arms of Ruder Finn. Mat Wilcox was one of a kind and so was her firm, with its crisis communications “War Room,” total devotion to clients, brutal honesty — even about Matt’s illness. Although Mat herself will carry on, a plus for the PR world, the firm is gone, and that is a definite minus.

Tags: Blogs, Editing, good writing, Public Relations, social media

by Richard Rotman

Professor of PR, Humber College and PR Writer Extraordinaire

Here’s some ways I’ve used my iPad in its first week…

Walked into the Dean’s office at the college where I teach, and dazzled him with simply having an iPad a day or so after launch and he also appreciated its many fantastic features. Also showed the all-female media faculty the machine, with one person saying, “I didn’t think I’d get to see one for several weeks.” Another faculty member already had one from a U.S. purchase.

Sat on my front porch on a nice warm summery night, answering emails with my new case, which came separately, securing the pad. The case is useful; makes it a bit heavier but the feature by which it’s propped up makes it easier to type and to use as pad for notes when giving a talk. It came separately and when Sheldon, the FedEx guy delivered it, he asked what it was, as each iPad owner received a second shipment. I told him and then asked, “Did anyone show it to you?” and then told him to sit down on a chair next to me and showed him what magic he’d been delivering.

I am definitely in the habit of reading the media in the morning at breakfast with the iPad. I haven’t missed my daily newspaper delivery and in fact now believe the iPad is more convenient than a big broadsheet. I’ve read it on the subway, on a bus and well…in the bathroom.

Today, I had to deliver a talk to a small group of people and it wasn’t feasible to use a projector. I outlined my talk in Word, emailed to myself, then opened it in Pages—a great App, all for $9.99. It was a great way to have a prompter, as I flipped up the pages with my fingers and kept talking. I also looked quite au courant to media studies teachers.

Starting to replace some Blackberry usages with it, too. Calendar for sure. A calorie counter to watch my weight. Blackberry mail is great and convenient but do I need it? My kids and a close friend use Blackberry Messenger. But I could do without it. Thinking of cutting off those usages with Blackberry as much as I love them. Saved on newspaper purchases and on telecom too?

So after one week, what do I think of it? I agree with Walt Mossberg even more. It could “profoundly” change personal computing. Its size is very convenient and it’s so much better to use in a meeting than a laptop—and for sitting on a porch using WiFi, it’s not only less obtrusive but also more convenient. The main reason for which I purchased it—media and books—will come to pass. I like it. I wonder what the next improved versions will be like?

Tags: Editing, good writing, iPad, Public Relations, social media, Twitter

by Richard Rotman

Professor of Public Relations, Humber College

PR Writer Extraordinaire

Part I

It arrived from China as scheduled but not on time. I had been tracking its journey from Shenzen to Anchorage, Alaska. It then flew to the FedEx hub in Memphis and on to Mississagua, ON, where it arrived at my home office at 2:00 pm. Sheldon, the FedEx delivery guy, said his station delivered 500 iPads and that he personally was responsible for 30.  Sheldon added that often no one is home when he must obtain signatures. I asked if he knew what he was delivering and he said, “Yes, I do and everyone is home today.” Immediately sent my kids a photo of it out of the box.

Is it the future of computing?

As was once said about Bruce Springsteen and the future of rock ‘n’ roll, I have seen the dawn of something new in computing and it’s called iPad. I agree with The Wall Street Journal’s Walt Mossberg that the touch entry could take over the mouse, which has dominated computing since the Mac’s intro in 1984.

Why do I have one? Because I had the very first Mac the first week it came out and two Apple Newtons, the first ever PDA? Partially but I believe that this venture will ultimately mean more.

I spent much of the first and second days exploring and opening my eyes to how it works.

General observations:

1. It is as good as the hype: seeing the high-resolution photos and fast processor at work is remarkable.
2. Some things are so amazing they are freakish: turning the pages in the Apple library and seeing how they wrinkle and can be partially turned is almost too dazzling. It comes with a copy of Winnie the Pooh, one of my old favorites; it almost makes me want to read it again.
3. The Kindle app from Amazon simply moves the pages forward with a finger. I downloaded a chapter from Tom Rachman’s The Imperfectionists, a journalism novel, and read it in bed at night. I wanted to read the third book in the Dragon Tattoo series but Amazon said it wasn’t available in Canada. Boo!

Apart from participating in the technology, my main purpose in getting an iPad was two-fold: read media online and eliminate paper; read books and reduce paper. On both those counts, it does appear to work as promised. As I cancelled my newspaper subscriptions, this is important.

App review:

• New York Times: great but not enough stories; still need the online version. No doubt I will be paying for the iPad version soon.
• Globe and Mail: Haven’t worked out the paid app but the one for Blackberry/iPhone is a masterpiece and it works on the iPad.
• Guardian Eyewitness (all photos) and BBC, both wonderful.
• Best app so far: Instapaper: This killer app repurposes web articles by eliminating ads, graphics and links and then turning the entire article into a news story with a headline and saving it for later reference.

Part II: people’s reactions, Apple’s Pages and Notepad.

Tags: Blogs, Editing, good writing, iPad, Public Relations, social media, Writing

iPads went on sale early this morning at big box electronics retailers but the real early adopters–those who put their order in on May 10 for the presale–have not received them from FedEx in most cases. FedEx says it might be into the evening even though all week long the delivery has been promised for before noon on Friday. In fact, the FedEx CSR said she could not guarantee any time at all because the delivery was now an ‘exceptionality.’ Apple demands that each package have a signature won’t release them without one’s John Hancock. You can’t leave your premises; waiting and waiting. No iPad. Jon Steward was right: sometimes Apple has become ‘the Man.’ Chaos out there, even people camping out overnight at the retailers. I want my iPad!

Tags: Editing, good writing, iPad, Public Relations, social media, Writing

October 9, 2009

by Richard E. Rotman –PR Writer Extraordinaire

All one has to do to find notable examples of poor news release writing is go to Canada Newsire on any day. Organizations pay good money to release this news but they don’t bother to. Here are originals and suggested corrections: why do these organizations bother?

I. Xpertdoc Technologies Inc. Appoints President – Ms Varsha Bhat

or:

Xpertdoc Technologies Inc. Appoints Varsha Bhat President

PRW Comment:

• Don’t need the Ms.
• More active to put her name first

Released version: MONTREAL, Oct. 9 /CNW Telbec/ – Xpertdoc Technologies Inc. – a Montreal based technology firm providing document output products and solutions – continues to ‘wow’ the local community with its recent new appointment. Xpertdoc welcomes Ms Varsha Bhat as the incoming President, effective immediately.

PRW Revision: MONTREAL, Oct. 9 /CNW Telbec/ – Xpertdoc Technologies Inc. – a Montreal-based technology firm providing document output products and solutions ‘wowed’ the industry by apppointing Varsha Bhat as its President.

Comments:

• Need a hyphen between Montreal and based
• If you must use the ‘wow’ idea, who is being wowed? Why the local community—isn’t the industry more important?
• ‘Continues to’ is one of those clauses that almost always be eliminated. Previous examples of ‘wow’ can be expressed in subsequent comments.
• ‘Recent new’ appointment is redundant and unnecessary. The announcement implies ‘new.’ The only way the qualifier would be relevant and ‘effective immediately’ is if the appointment took place in the future.
• Using Mr or Ms is not CP style. If saying that Bhat is female is important, isn’t there a stronger way to underscore it, such as she is the ‘industry’s first female’ or something like that.
• In the rest of the release, the CEO is ‘proud to announce’ the appointment, while an advisory board member is also ‘pleased’ as is an investor who is quoted, repeating the word. “Ms” is also repeated four times and her first and last name is used in the last paragraph, where it should not be necessary.

All that in one release!

Ontario Long Term Care Companies Recognized Nationally for Leadership and Excellence

Original: MARKHAM, ON, Oct. 9 /CNW/ – The Ontario Long Term Care Association (OLTCA) is delighted to congratulate two of its members on being nationally recognized for the levels of excellence they have achieved in developing quality relationships and processes within their organizations.

PRW: MARKHAM, ON, Oct. 9 /CNW/ – Two Ontario Long Term Care Association (OLTCA) members have been being nationally recognized for excellence in developing quality relationships and processes within their organizations as a result of the Mediacorp Canada Inc annual competition.

OMNI Health Care Ltd. was named one of Canada’s Top 100 Employers for 2010 and in September, Diversicare Canada received the National Quality Institute’s Order of Excellence Award for continuous excellence in quality.

Comments:

• Combines two sentences into one
• Avoids passive voice
• Gets rid of the “delighted to congratulate” idea, which is not news.

Original: “We applaud the owners, management and staff at OMNI Health Care and Diversicare Canada for their leadership and commitment to excellence that resulted in this distinguished recognition,” said Christina Bisanz, OLTCA CEO. “It reflects a desire I see across our membership to be the best that they can be for the benefit of the residents they serve.”

PRW: “We applaud everyone OMNI Health Care and Diversicare Canada for leadership and commitment to excellence resulting in this distinguished recognition,” said Christina Bisanz, OLTCA CEO.  “Our members seek to be the best service providers possible for their residents.”

Comments:

• So many superfluous words. “We applaud…is delighted to congratulate.”
• “It reflects a desire I see—“ can be totally eliminated.
• “For the benefit of the residents they serve?” Or: “the best service providers for their residents.”
• This is a poor excuse for a news release anyway—no news, flabby language, no chance it would mean anything to an editor.

Just incredible–I never understand why they bother, when the writing is so substandard. Until next time…

Tags: Blogs, Editing, good writing, Public Relations, Rhetoric, tips to better writing, Writing

This is another in the continuing series of randomly checking Canada Newswire to comment on writing and style. There were many instructive lessons in the copy below.

A DAY IN THE LIFE OF CANADA NEWSWIRE—Oct. 31

Attention Business Editors:
James Goodfellow joins the Board of Directors of Discovery Air

Original version:

LONDON, ON, Oct. 31 /CNW/ – Gil Bennett, the Chairman of the Board of Discovery Air Inc. (TSX A.A), is pleased to announce that Mr. James Goodfellow  has joined the Board of Directors of Discovery Air.

PR Writer Improvements:

James Goodfellow, former Deloitte & Touche LLP Vice-Chairman, has joined the Discovery Air Inc. Board, said Gil Bennett, Chairman. Read the rest of this entry »

Tags: Editing, Public Relations, Writing